Post by Cordius Valefor on Mar 4, 2013 8:15:33 GMT -5
For:Resurreccion Name:Pluma TormentaFeather Storm Type:Offensive Cost: Normal Taxing Range: Long Description Fires thirty feathers. Each feather creates a small explosion as that of a small dynamite when they have contact with either the target or any surface. Charges for one post, no other skill can be executed during the action
For:Resurreccion Name:Le garra Mutilar: Centinela Indicativo Mutilating claws: Callsign of the Sentinel Type:Offensive/Passive Buff. Post duration depends on how much slashes target has taken as well as the number of threads he's been in Resurreccion Cost: Moderately Taxing Range: Melee Description:His Talons will charge with each successful strike, cutting bits off spiritual pressure. Once the claws are fully charged with spiritual energy from the numerous attacks, the marks left by Cordius will explode attempting to mutilate the target completely. The buff on those marks will disappear when Cordius changes back to human form
For:Resurreccion Name:elevarse de Cuervo The Ascending Raven Type:Offensive/Combo Cost: Moderate Range: Melee to 30 meters Description:The technique would start by throwing the opponent in midair, or if the opponent is in Midair he'd twirl his body creating a cyclone damaging and sending the opponent flying. It severely scratches the foe's bare skin. The scratches the target receives has the same effect as "Callsign of the Sentinel" Action depends if the opponent is on the ground.
For: Resurreccion Name: Hierro Cuervo: Ala Plegable Iron Raven:Folding Wings Type:Defensive/Counterattack/Passive (One attack post) Cost: Normal-Moderately Taxing (Depending on offensive value of the attacker) Range: Melee Description:Uses his wings to guard against a heavy melee attack in such a way the wings absorbs the blow and adds it to the counterattack value wherein after a successful block he'd unleash a counterattack striking melee with his wings and talons at the same time. The counterattack effect is only temporary for 10 seconds.
Range is supposed to be listed as short, long, or mid, not a measurement. Please read the template descriptions.
Pluma Tormenta: Penetrating 30 feet below ground level is a bit much, you really don't need to specify that. Reason being, you can't guarantee that this will injure whoever it hits. Hankou determines what sort of injury they'll take. If they have a very high hankou compared to your seijuu, they won't die from it, and the injury they take could be relatively minor. So don't make any guarantees of injury or death.
You also need to specify how many feathers he can shoot.
Centinela despierto: Noche Espia: What do you mean by human form? If you mean when the zanpakuto is unsealed, no. You cannot use any abilities except for basic arrancar abilities when your zanpakuto is unsealed.
NEVER can anything passive be indefinite. It needs a post duration and cooldown. There needs to be a cost as well.
Since you've read the banned technique list, I'm surprised that you have so many stat boosts in this tech. Any sort of augmentation or stat boost is banned. Your stats only raise from resurreccion.
Since this entire technique is basically stat boosts, I think it would be best if you deleted it an replaced it with something that is actually a technique, and not just something that looks like a Segunda Etapa.