Dahlia's Techniques

Before I get started on the techniques in general, I'm curious to hear your explanation as to how a Quincy uses poison based attacks? There is nothing to support this in the canon, and of course we're an original site and obviously not bound as strictly to the source material as other sites may be, but I still need to see some reasonable explanation regarding these techniques before I even think of approving them. In my mind, what you've got here is a decent power set for a race other than Quincy.

Mar 2, 2013 1:31:43 GMT -5 DAHLIA DEVREAUX said:

UNRELEASED AND VOLLSTANDIG
Name: Waage der Nicht Rein (Scales of the Impure)
Item used: Ginto
Type: Offensive
Cost: Moderately Taxing
Range: Short to Long
Description: When talking ceases to persuade her opponents to stop their assaults, Dahlia uses this ability. This creates a pair of Scales that gather her venomous energy behind her. She also cannot move past a small area in this state, as the Scales MUST remain behind her at all times. Should a certain time pass and Dahlia not be incapacitated, a huge cloud of poison passes over the area in a massive blanket, moving far more quickly than one would imagine. This blanket of poison will have had enough time to gauge exactly which amount of poison will renders Dahlia and her opponent unconscious, spewing it out for that reason. (+10 successful hits on Dahlia)

Basically you get an avoid-death technique as long as you can survive a number of posts, unspecified by you at this point of time, after this technique has been used. This in combination with your other techniques, for reasons I'll go over in their review, is an automatic no from me. You've not even stated the size of the area she must remain inside, or how it gauges the exact amount of the poison required to lay both Dahlia and her opponent unconscious. If you want this technique approved, I require you to be extremely specific.

Mar 2, 2013 1:31:43 GMT -5 DAHLIA DEVREAUX said:

UNRELEASED
Name: Verteidiger der Giftig Schleier (Defender of the Venomous Veil)
Item used: Ginto
Type: Defensive
Cost: Heavily Taxing
Range: Point Blank to Long
Description: Once her Blut is worn down, her last line of defense is an explosions of thick air. It's not an explosion in the traditional sense, as no damage is caused by it. Merely an expulse of the smog, breathing it in allows the poison to settle within lungs and begin causing damage. The smog is a dark green in looks, and induces coughing fits once breathed in. Used in outdoor environments, or someone with wind abilities, the smog can be cleared with haste. However, the thick smog sits and festers within a confined space if left alone. The smog does nothing to Dahlia herself. (+2 posts with wind assistance)

Where does this come from exactly? That part needs to be more specific for a start. Again, I question the idea of a quincy with poison based powers, it makes not a jot of sense to me. What kind of damage does this cause? Is it treatable with healing kidou? High-speed regeneration? A decent sleep? A drink of water? Basically, how potent is it, and how easy is this to treat?

Mar 2, 2013 1:31:43 GMT -5 DAHLIA DEVREAUX said:

UNRELEASED
Name: Aussterben aller Fleisch (Extinction of all Flesh)
Item used: Ginto
Type: Offensive
Cost: Heavily Taxing
Range: Short to Long
Description: Through Dahlia's touch, she can transmit what would normally be a flesh-eating virus to others. However, this virus, due to living on a Quincy, had evolved to devour reiatsu. This will never eat enough to kill or even fully subdue another, but for as long as Dahlia remains in contact with her opponent, her virus will feed upon the victim until they have roughly a quarter of their reiatsu left, which is where the virus ceases to affect. While the virus feeds, it feeds upon Dahlia as well. This ability is signaled by the green symbol on her forehead glowing faintly. (devours 10% per post)

10% is a relatively large amount for you to drain with every post of contact. What happens if your character is punched in the face three times over the course of one post? That's 30%. Also, is this effective through touching her clothing? What would the reiatsu draining effect be upon a reiatsu based attack connecting with her, could she block kidou by her bare hands? There's also the question of what would happen if she was struck with a reiatsu sensitive weapon like a zanpakuto? There are alot of questions regarding this ability. Fit the answers, or at least try to, into the description if you want to be approved.

Mar 2, 2013 1:31:43 GMT -5 DAHLIA DEVREAUX said:

UNRELEASED AND VOLLSTANDIG
Name: Ermüdenden Schuss (Fatiguing Shot)
Item used: Bow
Type: Offensive
Cost: Very Mildly Taxing
Range: Short to Long
Description: Dahlia fires her arrows much slower than a normal Quincy would. However, it is because her main ability is one that affects her arrows. In exchange for the slow flight, they inflict fatiguing damage as they land. They cannot do any physical harm, as Dahlia herself cannot cause physical damage to anyone. There arrows will merely pass harmlessly through another, causing them to feel tired. However, a tired person is more susceptible from her poison. this ability only expends energy by firing an arrow.

How exactly is a tired person more susceptible to her poison? And not only that, I would question how a Quincy cannot cause physical harm. Quincy's are a dramatically harmful species within the canon, so this ability makes no sense in my mind.

Mar 2, 2013 1:31:43 GMT -5 DAHLIA DEVREAUX said:

VOLLSTANDIG
Name: Puls der Maden (Pulse of the Maggots)
Item used: Ginto
Type: Offensive
Cost: Moderately Taxing
Range: Short to Long
Description: With a flick of her wrist, Dahlia sends out a pulsing wave of energy in all directions that does damage based on how poisoned the target is. If the target has miraculously avoided the envenomated attacks searing around the area, the only thing that happens it a slight push back. What the pulse does is activates the poisons within the body of the victim and sends them into overdrive, causing crippling inner pains and a burning sensation.

Your use of the word miraculously there is worrying to me. This implies that you think it would be a miracle for an opponent to avoid your poisonous attacks, and well let's be honest here. Miracles don't tend to happen unless someone is roleplaying outside the rules, so that implies to me that you consider your poison to be unavoidable. Which I don't like.

I don't mind the ability strangely though, doesn't seem too bad. I would like to know how long this advanced poison effect lasts upon a target however.

Mar 2, 2013 1:31:43 GMT -5 DAHLIA DEVREAUX said:

VOLLSTANDIG
Name: Immer Umarmung Mich, Unsere Lieben Wimmeln (Forever Embrace Me, Our Love Abound)
Item used: Ginto
Type: Offensive / Defensive
Cost: Heavily Taxing
Range: Point Blank
Description: To weather the harrowing poisons and tiring arrows takes dedication. All of Dahlia's techniques can be broken with a strong enough constitution. However, by far her deadliest attack is not an attack at all. In fact, it is merely a hug. Should Dahlia's opponent be weakened by her other abilities, she may begin to slowly approach them with her arms outstretched. When her victim looks to her, they feels the toxins working in their minds, doing their best to place the victim in a slight state of hypnosis. However, this is not hard to break at all. Those that fall victim to her psuedo-hypnosis are inclined to return the asked-for embrace, locking themselves within the arms of the woman. Once her arms completely encircle the victim, her poisons are amplified tenfold and surge the victim's body. However, this process is painless. The venom courses until it takes the victim's mind, rendering them limp in her arms. They are still fully aware, they simply cannot move. However, this does not last long, and if Dahlia breaks the embrace, which she must to do anything else, the numbness goes very quickly, merely leaving the victim with hangover-type symptoms. (+1 post if embrace is broken)

Basically, if you hug someone under the effect of your poison, they become stuck in place until one post after you let them go. Hmm. okay, I'll let that one go unmolested.